Please Give Name!!!

[heavenlight]

Hi Everyone

I have written this another poem, which is alomost complete but not sure what name I should give, so I thought you guys might be able to help.

Not to make this thread boring so I tought I should add bit of fun to this so please submit your names you think I should give to my poem.
The name which I will like the most will get the rep points.

Thursday 26th Feb will be the last day to submit.
(This is not a competition but just a bit of fun and apology for any miss-spelling as I'm not an expert writing in roman english)

The Poem:


Teri masoom batein mera dil bhelaein
Mujhe bar bar who tere pas bulaein
Tere honton se nikle woh gulabi lafz mujhe sunhere palon ki yad dilaein
Jab bhi unhe me yad karoon hamesha woh tera ehsas dilaein

Suraj ke jagne tak wo rat hame or nazdik le aye
Tera mujhse bat karna dil mera kabu na aye
Per tere shirmiley bol mujhe apni auqat yad dilaye
Phir tujhe I Love You kehna ke tera dil sharm se bhar aye

Tujhe apne pas na par kar me hamesha akela ho jayon
Per tu mujhe samjhaye ke ankhein band karo to me pas ayon
Or phir tera khawabon mein aana ke me tujh per fida ho jaon
Per kuch kahe bagher tera chale jana ke phir se toot jayon

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22 views and not 1 comment. Wao

Ok how about *WOH LAMHE*

[Sweet Munda]

damn, makin it feel like u'v jus had a new born baby n askin for a name lool :P, name him, i mean name it, Teri Masoom Batein or maybe Tera Ehsas

Nice Poem btw but a few typos, should correct em, hope i helped

[heavenlight]

damn, makin it feel like u'v jus had a new born baby n askin for a name lool :P, name him, i mean name it, Teri Masoom Batein or maybe Tera Ehsas

Nice Poem btw but a few typos, should correct em, hope i helped

Thinking a baby name is easier. lol.

Thanks for liking it.

"few typos, should correct em".... which ones???

[Sweet Munda]

Teri masoom batein mera dil bhehlaein
Mujhe bar bar woh tere paas bulaein
Tere honton se nikle woh gulabi lafz mujhe sunehre palon ki yaad dilaein
Jab bhi unhe main yaad karoon hamesha woh tera ehsaas dilaein

Suraj ke jagne tak wo raat hame or nazdik le aye
Tera mujhse baat karna dil mera kabu na aye
Per tere shirmiley bol mujhe apni auqat yaad dilaye
Phir tujhe I Love You kehna ke tera dil sharm se bhar aye

Tujhe apne pas na paa kar main hamesha akela ho jaaon
Per tu mujhe samjhaye ke ankhein band karo to main paas aaon
Or phir tera khawabon mein aana ke main tujh per fida ho jaon
Per kuch kahe bagher tera chale jana ke phir se toot jaaon

[heavenlight]

Hey thanks a lot for your effort in correcting my spellings. Will help me finishing my book.

Thank You

[Jo.]

i would deff go with Tera Ehsas...because your talkin about your feelings....
so or "Lamhe" because ur also tokin about memories ...
but mostly feelings so....

lubly poem....
and yea sum typos wich Sweet Munda corrected :p

Tujhe apne pas na paa kar main hamesha akela ho jaaon
Per tu mujhe samjhaye ke ankhein band karo to main paas aaon
Or phir tera khawabon mein aana ke main tujh per fida ho jaon
Per kuch kahe bagher tera chale jana ke phir se toot jaaon

I think there are still sum typos

Tujhe apne paas na paa kar main hamesha akela ho jaaon,
Par tu mujhe samjhaye ke ankhein band karo to main paas aaon,
Aur phir tera khwabon mein aana ke main tujh pe fida ho jaoon,
Par kuch kahe bina tera chale jana to main phir se toot jaoon.

ok thats my Corrections lol....:D
hope i helped ciao!

[heavenlight]

Thank You Lady.Punjabee and Sweet Munda

You guys have been a big help.